You realize this is literature? This guy [wikipedia.org] comes to mind, maybe you've read his Post Office (or watched Barfly) which is more likely to to be read a hundred years from now than almost anything on the lists of bestselling books around that time. In pulp format (small pages, big letters, not unlike mobile phones) I'd say what you wrote is about three pages long maybe even four, short but perfectly acceptable in a short story collection. A hundred more like this and you might have a book and in my opinion it would be a good book. Do what you do, it works, and thanks for a good read.
(Score: 2) by Yog-Yogguth on Tuesday January 20 2015, @07:02AM
You realize this is literature? This guy [wikipedia.org] comes to mind, maybe you've read his Post Office (or watched Barfly) which is more likely to to be read a hundred years from now than almost anything on the lists of bestselling books around that time. In pulp format (small pages, big letters, not unlike mobile phones) I'd say what you wrote is about three pages long maybe even four, short but perfectly acceptable in a short story collection. A hundred more like this and you might have a book and in my opinion it would be a good book. Do what you do, it works, and thanks for a good read.